Regan, it's so cool how you used dialogue between you and your Mom when you were begging to be a waitress, and you also used idioms (bun in the oven!), metaphors (like a tape stuck on repeat) and lots of characterization for all the cast of family characters. The best was the contrast between your nearly-fistfighting Uncles! Nice work and good revision. You have really improved and your voice is strong here. Thank you.
Regan, it's so cool how you used dialogue between you and your Mom when you were begging to be a waitress, and you also used idioms (bun in the oven!), metaphors (like a tape stuck on repeat) and lots of characterization for all the cast of family characters. The best was the contrast between your nearly-fistfighting Uncles! Nice work and good revision. You have really improved and your voice is strong here. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mr.Lohre! I loved your class and you have taught me many things I will carry on throughout my college years! Thank you!
DeleteMy pleasure, Regan. Have a great break, and please stay in touch. Mike
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